Li Ming
4分
微点评：你对模版不熟悉，建议你多看看满分作文，熟悉一下这类作文的写作思路。对于不熟悉其词义或用法的词，尽量不用。
5-7分
第一篇
Dear Kate,
There will be a Christmas party at English corner on Dec.25th. We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 6 p.m. This will be followed by a game. At around 7 p.m. a meeting will be held. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before Dec.24th.
Campus English Corner
October 22, 2012
修改意见：
Dear Kate,
There will be a Christmas party at English corner on Dec.25th. We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 6 p.m. This will be followed by a game. At around 7 p.m. a meeting will be held. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before Dec.24th.
(加Sincerely yours，) Campus English Corner
October 22, 2012(删除)
5分
微点评：考研小作文的字数要求是100词左右，你的作文虽然没有大问题，但是包含的内容太少，句型变换等也太少了。另外，要注意书信的格式。
第二篇
Dear Miss Yuan,
There will be a celebrity party for the new year in the activity room on the next Saturday. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 6 oclock in the evening. This will be followed by a serious of wonderful performances played by our classmates. At around 8 oclock, we project some interaction activities to animate the atmosphere so as to promote the relationships of classmates. Whats more, we prepared some gifts to be presented to the winners.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the next Wednesday.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Miss Yuan,
There will be a celebrity(改为celebration) party for the new year in the activity room on the next Saturday. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 6 oclock in the evening. This will be followed by a serious(拼写错误，改为series) of wonderful performances played by our classmates. At around 8 oclock, we project some interaction activities to animate the atmosphere so as to promote the relationships of classmates. Whats more, we prepared some gifts to be presented to the winners.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the(删除) next Wednesday.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
7分
微点评：写作文的时候再细心一些，注意单词的拼写。背单词时要把词义背牢。
第三篇
Dear Professor,
There will an Academic Exchange of East Asia International Law at No.1 lecture theatre on April 19, 2012. We should be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 14:30. This will be followed by a communication about application of law of East Asia economic trade with other professors and experts come from Japan, Korea and other countries. At around 19:30, a dancing party will be holding in university auditorium.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before April 12,2012.
Law School PKU
April 5,2013
修改意见：
Dear Professor,
There will an Academic Exchange of East Asia International Law at No.1 lecture theatre on April 19, 2012. We should be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 14:30. This will be followed by a communication about application of law of East Asia economic trade with other professors and experts come(改为coming) from Japan , Korea and other countries. At around 19:30, a dancing party will be holding(改为held) in university auditorium.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before April 12,2012.
加Yours sincerely,
Law School PKU
April 5,2013(删除)
7分
微点评：注意书信的格式以及被动语态的问题。一句话里不能有两个谓语动词。
第四篇
Dear Bob,
There will be a summer celebrate party for teenagers at the playground of Beijing Forgin University on this weekend. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 9:00 to 11:00in the morning of the Weekend. This will be followed by a music gathering which you can communicate with others, also you can eat various kinds of delicious food. At around the next time to 5:00 pm, it is the free time for us to take a series of activities, such as playing cards, singing songs and so on.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the final date that I have informed to you.
Sincerely yours,
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Bob,
There will be a summer celebrate party for teenagers at the playground of Beijing Forgin (拼写错误，改为Foreign)University on this weekend. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 9:00 to 11:00(start后面接的是具体的某个时间点)in the morning of the Weekend. This will be followed by a music gathering which you can communicate with others, also you can eat various kinds of delicious food. At around the next time to(删除) 5:00 pm, it is the free time for us to take a series of activities, such as playing cards ,singing songs and so on.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the final date that I have informed to you.(写一个具体的时间，例如本周四)
Sincerely yours,
Li Ming
5分
微点评：你对模版的理解不够透彻，建议你对于同一个题目，多看一些模版，然后归纳出一个自己的模版。
第五篇
Dear Mr.Bob,
There will be a nationwide academic communicatiom involved in the education of China in Peking University on Wendsday. We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at eight o"clock am on that day. This will be followed by a dabate on social phenomenon nowadays. At around ten o"clock, there will be a interaction between parents and their childrens.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before Tuesday.
Yours sincerely
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Mr.Bob,
There will be a nationwide academic communicatiom(拼写错误，改为communication) involved in the education of China in Peking University on Wendsday(拼写错误，改为Wednesday). We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at eight o"clock am on that day(删除). This will be followed by a dabate(拼写错误，改为debate) on social phenomennon(拼写错误，改为phenomenon) nowadays. At around ten o"clock, there will be a(改为an) interaction between parents and their childrens(children是child复数)
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before Tuesday.
Yours sincerely(加逗号)
Li Ming
5分
微点评：写作文时要细心一些，你的作文没有什么大问题，就是拼写错误太多了。
8-10分
第一篇
Dear Dr.Wang,
There will be a conference about global environment held at auditorium in our university on January 5th. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 9:00 in the morning. This will be followed by a brilliant speech from our foreign guests. At around 10:00 a.m., a debate of environmental issues will be given by students from both China and America.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before next Friday.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Dr.Wang,
There will be a conference about global environment held at auditorium in our university on January 5th. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 9:00 in the morning. This will be followed by a brilliant speech from our foreign guests. At around 10:00 a.m., a debate of environmental issues will be given by students from both China and America.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before next Friday.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
9分
微点评：作文写得很好，没有语法错误，但是内容要是再丰富一些会更好。
第二篇
Dear Xiaoqiang,
There will be a banquet to celebrate the admission of Beijing University for our best friend Tracy in my home on January 5,2013. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at five O"clock in the afternoon. This will be followed by a hearty dinner which my wife will cook. At around seven O"clock,we will hold a small dancing ball that I think everybody would enjoy it.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before December 28,2012.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Xiaoqiang,
There will be a banquet to celebrate the admission of Beijing University for our best friend Tracy in my home on January 5,2013. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at five O"clock in the afternoon. This will be followed by a hearty dinner which my wife will cook. At around seven O"clock,we will hold a small dancing ball that I think everybody would enjoy it.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before December 28,2012.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
10分
微点评：作文写得非常不错，继续保持！
第三篇
Dear Mary,
There will be a high school reunion at Lijiang Hall of Cuihu Hotel on May 15th. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 2:30 p.m. This will be followed by a speech given by monitor in memory of our headmaster. At around 5:00 p.m, there will be a banquet held by student union of our school, in which Chef Monica and her team will provide various kinds of classical school snacks to all of the guests.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before this weekend.
Yours truly,
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Mary,
There will be a high school reunion at Lijiang Hall of Cuihu Hotel on May 15th. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at 2:30 p.m. This will be followed by a speech given by monitor in memory of our headmaster. At around 5:00 p.m, there will be a banquet held by student union of our school, in which Chef Monica and her team will provide various kinds of classical (用词不当，改为classic) school snacks to all of the guests.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before this weekend.
Yours truly,
Li Ming
9分
微点评：作文写得很不错，如果对于classical和 classic 分不清的话，你就可以不写，写错了反而要扣分。
第四篇
Dear Xiaoming,
There will be a ceremony for new students in our school hall on October 20.We would be honored to have you there with us .The occasion will start at seven oclock in the evening .This will be followed by a dinner party including Chinese and English songs , modern dance and instrumental performance. At around ten, we will hold a small ball, in which students can have further understanding about each other and our school.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before this Friday afternoon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming
修改意见：
Dear Xiaoming,
There will be a ceremony for new students in our school hall on October 20.We would be honored to have you there with us .The occasion will start at seven oclock in the evening .This will be followed by a dinner party including Chinese and English songs , modern dance and instrumental performance. At around ten, we will hold a small ball, in which students can have further understanding about each other and our school.
I really hope you can make it. RSVP before this Friday afternoon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming
10分
微点评：这篇作文写得非常好，基本没有问题，继续保持！
第五篇
Dear Amy,
There will be a lecture given by Lucius Annaeus Seneca at Roman Forum on the morning of August 18th, BC50. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at nine o"clock. This will be followed by a debate between scholars. At around mid-afternoon, Nero the Emperor will show himself up.
We really hope you can make it. RSVP before the third day you have got our letter. Yours truely,
River Song and the Doctor
修改意见：
Dear Amy,
There will be a lecture given by Lucius Annaeus Seneca at Roman Forum on the morning of August 18th, BC50. We would be honored to have you there with us.
The occasion will start at nine o"clock. This will be followed by a debate between scholars. At around mid-afternoon, Nero the Emperor will show himself up.
We really hope you can make it. RSVP before the third day you have got our letter. Yours truely(拼写错误，改为truly),
River Song and the Doctor
8分
微点评：作文写得很好，就是要注意一下单词拼写，另外，内容最好再扩充一下。
